Issue February 2010 Flash Fiction Online February 2010

A Story of n Words: How Low Can You Go?

I want to address the question of how short a story can be and still be a story, but to get there we have to consider an obvious question: What is a story?

Consider the poor writer whose manuscript was just rejected. The editor has been kind enough to provide some specific comment in the form of three scribbled words on the form rejection. “Not a story.” What in the world does that mean?

A conscientious writer might endeavor to find out. Let’s say she goes to the library and brings home a stack of books about writing, from popular how-to-write titles to volumes of literary theory. She reads in E.M. Forster’s observation that any sequence of narrative events can be a story. To illustrate the difference between story and plot, Forster says that “The king died, and then the queen died” is a story and “The king dies, and then the queen died of grief” is a plot. Well, that’s not help to our writer. Her manuscript portrayed stuff happening. She knocked off any number of kings and queens, in fact, but the editor had still pronounced the effort “Not a story.”

She keeps reading and finds out that a story is character plus change, or is good people behaving badly, or is two dogs and one bone. Maybe she encounters the theory first described by Scott Meredith and later taught by Algis Budrys, going something like this: A character in a context has a problem that she tries three time to solve, failing each time, at which point the character either has an insight, changes her approach, and succeeds or refuses the insight, tries the same thing she has tried before, and is destroyed.

Not a few writers have discovered this Meredith/Budrys formulation or one like it and gone on to use it to tell successful stories. Indeed, some amateur editors and reviewers have found this structure to be so common in published stories that they have come to think of it as a prescription, insisting on having protagonists try exactly three times. A story that doesn’t fit this model is, in their view, “not a story.”

But the professional editor who wrote “Not a story” on the rejection form did not, believe me, have any particular formula or model for story writing in mind. Any editor in the business for long would know that Forster’s definition and the Meredith/Budrys definition of story are both correct… and both utterly inadequate. What makes a story can’t be summed up, for all stories, for all time, because whether a collection of words comes down to one question in the mind of one reader at a time: “Did this satisfy me?”

Forster’s definition can describe a narrative in which one thing follows another, sure enough, but the reader doesn’t care. Any definition that proposes particular fictive elements arranged in a particular structure excludes texts that, while omitting some of the “necessary” bits, still leave readers feeling happy and sated.

A story is a story when a reader says so.

Subjective definitions drive some people crazy, of course, especially when they, like our hypothetical writer, hope to use the definition as a set of instructions. But they can also be the most honest and inclusive of definitions. Damon Knight once said, amid disputes about what was “real” science fiction, that science fiction was whatever literature he was pointing at when he said, “That’s science fiction.” That is, he was claiming to know it when he saw it.

The same is true of story. Some texts leave most readers feeling that they have read a story. Some texts satisfy only a few readers, or none. But the judgment is made one text, one reader at a time.

“Not a story,” scrawls the editor, meaning, “In my experienced judgment, this text does not deliver the experience that I know my readers refer to with the word story.” In the case of popular fiction, the lack of satisfying story might be successfully addressed by shaping the material to conform to the model typical of such fiction. The editor might well hope that the writer reads an article by Algis Budrys and rewrites accordingly.

But experienced editors know that the test of the pudding is in the eating. A story can satisfy the reader’s craving for story in any number of ways, some of which haven’t been invented or attempted yet. An editor can hear a story described and think that it doesn’t sound like a story, but that never means that it couldn’t possibly be a story. Told the right way, it could be. The only test is to give it to a reader and ask if, while reading it and afterward, the reader thought it was a story.

This subjectivity means that the question of how short a story can be also has a subjective answer. It depends on the reader. Some of us can read very few words and, if they are the right dozen words, feel the satisfaction of having read a story. Hemingway proposed that “For sale: Baby shoes. Never worn,” was a short story. Is it? For some readers, it is.

The editor who writes on a manuscript “Not a story” or “This isn’t long enough to really be a story” is offering either a private reaction or is anticipating the reaction of his readers. The writer might say, “But Hemingway wrote a story in six words!” to which the editor could reply, “No, he didn’t!” They’d both be right.

Mostly by accident, I discovered that for some readers telling several very short stories in a row makes all of them stories when the same texts, one at a time, would be something less than stories. I always give my shortshortshort subscribers at least 200 words, which has forced me to present my shortest narratives in groups, as in the example, “One-Sentence Stories.” Perhaps putting one very short story after another lets the reader get used to the idea, sentence by sentence, that maybe these little bursts really are stories. Maybe I just wear the reader down by saying, in effect: This is a story. And this. And this.

The closest you can come to a definitive answer of “How short can a story be?” is to ask yourself how many words were in the shortest story you ever read. Six? Ten? One hundred and thirty-two? The fewest words that ever satisfied you defines the limit of minimalism in your own work.

 

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Six One-Sentence Stories

This story collection is an exemplar for Short-short Sighted #19, “A Story of n Words: How Low Can You Go?

Story One

He left the village of his birth, crossed the mountains, crossed the seas, saw great cities, learned a few words in a dozen tongues, met the high and the low, and returned after years of wandering to the village of his birth where for the rest of his life he suffered nostalgia for his village as it had been when he left.

Story Two

She spent her days reading books about diseases she did not have until the eyestrain made her blind.

Story Three

In the hospital she gradually began to remember the faces and names of friends who came to visit, the colors she liked best, the car she was driving during the accident, and that she had at one time been a man.

Story Four

“I’m going for milk,” he said to his wife, and as he walked to the store and back he passed teenagers using words he didn’t know and thought about how everything, even language, changed faster and faster now that he was getting old, and when he said to his wife, “Here’s the milk,” she said, “Did pob the stemcrease oronian over?”

Story Five

She sat reading a story about a woman who sat on a bus reading a story, then looked up to find that she was, in fact, a woman sitting on a bus reading a story even though it seemed to her that a moment before she hadn’t been on a bus at all, had, in fact, been living a very different life although she could not now remember what that other life had been.

Story Six

“Life is short,” said the grieving father, “thank God!”


 Bruce Holland Rogers has a home base in Eugene, Oregon, the tie-dye capital of the world. He writes all types of fiction: SF, fantasy, literary, mysteries, experimental, and work that’s hard to label.

For six years, Bruce wrote a column about the spiritual and psychological challenges of full-time fiction writing for Speculations magazine. Many of those columns have been collected in a book, Word Work: Surviving and Thriving as a Writer (an alternate selection of the Writers Digest Book Club). He is a motivational speaker and trains workers and managers in creativity and practical problem solving.

He has taught creative writing at the University of Colorado and the University of Illinois. Bruce has also taught non-credit courses for the University of Colorado, Carroll College, the University of Wisconsin, and the private Flatiron Fiction Workshop. He is a member of the permanent faculty at the Whidbey Writers Workshop MFA program, a low-residency program that stands alone and is not affiliated with a college or university. It is the first and so far only program of its kind. Currently he is teaching creative writing and literature at Eötvös Loránd University in Budapest, Hungary, on a Fulbright grant.


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The Five Boons of Life

by Mark Twain

February 2015

“Here are gifts. Take one, leave the others. And be wary, choose wisely; oh, choose wisely! for only one of them is valuable.” Artwork : This 1874 engraving of Twain is in the public domain.
Artwork : This 1874 engraving of Twain is in the public domain.

Chapter I

In the morning of life came a good fairy with her basket, and said:

“Here are gifts. Take one, leave the others. And be wary, chose wisely; oh, choose wisely! for only one of them is valuable.”

The gifts were five: Fame, Love, Riches, Pleasure, Death. The youth said, eagerly:

“There is no need to consider”; and he chose Pleasure.

He went out into the world and sought out the pleasures that youth delights in. But each in its turn was short-lived and disappointing, vain and empty; and each, departing, mocked him. In the end he said: “These years I have wasted. If I could but choose again, I would choose wisely.”

Chapter II

The fairy appeared, and said:

“Four of the gifts remain. Choose once more; and oh, remember — time is flying, and only one of them is precious.”

The man considered long, then chose Love; and did not mark the tears that rose in the fairy’s eyes.

After many, many years the man sat by a coffin, in an empty home. And he communed with himself, saying: “One by one they have gone away and left me; and now she lies here, the dearest and the last. Desolation after desolation has swept over me; for each hour of happiness the treacherous trader, Love, has sold me I have paid a thousand hours of grief. Out of my heart of hearts I curse him.”

Chapter III

“Choose again.” It was the fairy speaking.

“The years have taught you wisdom — surely it must be so. Three gifts remain. Only one of them has any worth — remember it, and choose warily.”

The man reflected long, then chose Fame; and the fairy, sighing, went her way.

Years went by and she came again, and stood behind the man where he sat solitary in the fading day, thinking. And she knew his thought:

“My name filled the world, and its praises were on every tongue, and it seemed well with me for a little while. How little a while it was! Then came envy; then detraction; then calumny; then hate; then persecution. Then derision, which is the beginning of the end. And last of all came pity, which is the funeral of fame. Oh, the bitterness and misery of renown! target for mud in its prime, for contempt and compassion in its decay.”

Chapter IV

“Chose yet again.” It was the fairy’s voice.

“Two gifts remain. And do not despair. In the beginning there was but one that was precious, and it is still here.”

“Wealth — which is power! How blind I was!” said the man. “Now, at last, life will be worth the living. I will spend, squander, dazzle. These mockers and despisers will crawl in the dirt before me, and I will feed my hungry heart with their envy. I will have all luxuries, all joys, all enchantments of the spirit, all contentments of the body that man holds dear. I will buy, buy, buy! deference, respect, esteem, worship — every pinchbeck grace of life the market of a trivial world can furnish forth. I have lost much time, and chosen badly heretofore, but let that pass; I was ignorant then, and could but take for best what seemed so.”

Three short years went by, and a day came when the man sat shivering in a mean garret; and he was gaunt and wan and hollow-eyed, and clothed in rags; and he was gnawing a dry crust and mumbling:

“Curse all the world’s gifts, for mockeries and gilded lies! And miscalled, every one. They are not gifts, but merely lendings. Pleasure, Love, Fame, Riches: they are but temporary disguises for lasting realities — Pain, Grief, Shame, Poverty. The fairy said true; in all her store there was but one gift which was precious, only one that was not valueless. How poor and cheap and mean I know those others now to be, compared with that inestimable one, that dear and sweet and kindly one, that steeps in dreamless and enduring sleep the pains that persecute the body, and the shames and griefs that eat the mind and heart. Bring it! I am weary, I would rest.”

Chapter V

The fairy came, bringing again four of the gifts, but Death was wanting. She said:

“I gave it to a mother’s pet, a little child. It was ignorant, but trusted me, asking me to choose for it. You did not ask me to choose.”

“Oh, miserable me! What is left for me?”

“What not even you have deserved: the wanton insult of Old Age.”

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Pêlos

by Aaron Bilodeau

February 2015

The pile of pillows and the old wig were still feigning sleep when a pair of ravens landed on the windowsill. Artwork : This drawing is in the .
Artwork : This drawing is in the public domain.

Lydia turned out the light, picked up her backpack, and opened her window. She was expecting the gust of cool night air, the smell of freedom, and the call of the dance floor. She was not expecting the shower of gold.

“Ow!” She threw her pack up as a shield from the heavy, glittering hail. “Son of a — ow!

Lydia swung her backpack through the air, swatting at the golden projectiles until they stopped falling and coalesced into the shape of a slender boy wearing a white sheet. Her wild backswing caught him behind the ear and sent him tumbling across her bedroom floor.

“Ow!” The boy sat up, rubbing his neck. “What was — ”

“What are you doing?” She hissed, hoping her father hadn’t heard. “Get out of my room!”

“What? No, wait! I’m here to seduce you!”

“What?” She raised her backpack for another blow, but paused at the heavy creak of floorboards outside her door.

“I’m — ” the boy started, but she slapped her hands over his mouth with the kind of grip only a desperate teenager can summon. The door to her room opened slightly and a thin wedge of light fell across her bed, where carefully arranged pillows and an old wig made a hopefully convincing outline. Lydia crouched behind her desk, pinning the boy, both arms wrapped around his head like iron bands.

“Get out of here!” She whispered again when the door had closed and the footsteps were gone.

“No, wait, please…” He looked up at her with pleading eyes. He had very long lashes, the kind Lydia wished she had, and she hated him for it. “I can’t go yet!”

“Why not?”

He ran his fingers through his tousled hair. “Well, I’m a god! And you’re a beautiful maiden, locked away by your tyrant father. We have to… I’m supposed to…”

“Oh, no.” Lydia backed away. “This is not happening.”

“Was the gold too much?” The boy asked hopefully. “’Cause I could be a swan, or a bull, if you like that better.”

Lydia shook her head. “Okay, first of all, no. Second, I am not beautiful. And third, eeew! A bull? Seriously?”

“Um… maybe not. But I — ” He stood up, got his feet tangled in her computer’s power strip and lunged face-first across the room.

Lydia caught him before his face-plant could wake the neighborhood. “You’re not very good at this god thing, are you?”

The boy deflated. It was like watching a pile of rakes collapse. “I’m sorry. My… my dad says I have to… well… you know. Make him proud. Or he’ll turn me into a sea pig and banish me to the pits of Tartarus.”

“My dad will do a lot worse than that if he finds a boy in my room.” Lydia glanced at the door. “So, look…”

“Pêlos.” He smiled.

“What?”

“Pêlos. It’s my name. And also my specialty. It means ’dirt’.”

“Dirt?” she raised an eyebrow. “I’m being wooed by a god of dirt?

“But not for long! I’m going places. My dad just says I have to start out on the ground floor. So to speak.”

Lydia sat down on her bed, massaging her temples. “Well, you can go right back there, and find some other window to jump through. Try Becky Hamilton’s house. Most boys do, sooner or later.”

“I can’t do that!” He sat down on the floor, slowly. “I mean… you’re the most beautiful girl in the world. It has to be you.”

Lydia rolled her eyes. “Oh, barf.”

“I saw you,” he went on, “by the edge of the fountain, in the park. You spent the whole day there, with your sketchbook. You drew the tall woman on her phone, and the old man sleeping on the bench, and the pigeons, and on every page there were dragons. And as you drew them I watched you. I watched the sun moving across the water, painting dapples on your sparkling cheek. I watched the way your skirt fell across your knees, the trailing edge of your hair, like a raven’s feathers, and the speckles of dirt between your perfect toes. I knew it then.”

Lydia pulled her feet under the bed, suddenly very self-conscious. “I… like to draw.”

He sat down next to her. “A great hero will spring from the union of our loins.”

She jumped up. “Whoa! Okay, that has to stop right now. There will be no unioning of any loins today, got it? And… holy crud, haven’t you people ever heard of safe sex?”

Pêlos blinked. “My aunt was born from some sea foam and an oyster.”

“Point,” Lydia said. “But you can’t just go popping into a girl’s bedroom and expect her to… It doesn’t work that way!”

Pêlos looked up at her with those dark, guileless eyes. “How does it work?”

Lydia looked at the window. “You… talk. And go out. You bring her flowers or something, or go dancing.”

Dancing. Sara was probably at the club by now, waiting for her. Retard Creed would be playing, but at least they had a dance floor.

“Look, Pêlos…” she looked him over. He did have very pretty eyes. “I don’t suppose you have a car?”

The pile of pillows and the old wig were still feigning sleep when a pair of ravens landed on the windowsill.

“Oh my god!” Lydia stifled a giggle. She stumbled into her room, suddenly clumsy on tired, booted feet. “That is so much better than a car! I could fly like that forever!”

Pêlos opened his mouth, but she put her finger across his lips. “Not literally. I’m just saying I had a good time.”

“Then…” He licked his lips. “You’ll see me again?”

“Maybe,” she straightened the ruffles on his dark coat. “If you call first next time. And if your dad doesn’t turn you into a sea pig.”

He smiled at her with those dancing, bottomless eyes. “I’ll call you.”

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The Times That Bleed Together

by Paige Gardner

February 2015

He is not an impressive man. He is five-foot six with a gray suit, gray hair, and a bowler’s hat. “I don’t think you can do anything to help.” Artwork : Photo by Striatic, found on and licensed under a .
Artwork : Photo by Striatic, found on Flickr and licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution license.

Today, the world ends.

Tuesday last, Reed grabs his best friend’s shoulders and says, “You’ve got to stop this.”

Luke looks at him and wonders why Reed is the only person in the world who hasn’t changed.

Three years ago, it starts with Luke covered in blood that is not his own and the life that should be his laying dead at his feet.

It starts in that split second, born of grief and rage and madness. It lights a fuse.

Luke looks up at the sky and screams wordlessly.

What he means is: I will fix this.

Six days ago, Luke the present looks at Luke the once was.

They say in unison, “This is bad.”

Sixty six years ago, Ray Bradbury writes a short story about stepping on butterflies.

Two hundred and sixty six weeks ago, Luke puts it down in favor of Jurassic Park.

One year ago, Reed is sitting on the washing machine when Luke skids inside. “I figured it out.”

Reed’s darks are going round and round and round in the wash and the cycle’s a special kind of hypnotic, product of fabric softener and the slow slosh of hot water. “Figured what out?” he asks.

“I can fix it,” Luke says.

“But there’s nothing wrong,” Reed says but the ghost of Olivia is bleeding in Luke’s eyes. “At least nothing we can fix.”

“You’re wrong.”

“Dude, that was two years ago. I hate to be the one to say it but it’s past. It’s over. Move on.”

“I can change it,” Luke says.

“I need your help,” Luke says.

Three hundred and sixty six days ago, Luke is at his breaking point. The equation is impossible. The physics don’t exist.

“Having trouble there, son?” a man asks.

He is not an impressive man. He is five-foot six with a gray suit, gray hair, and a bowler’s hat. “I don’t think you can do anything to help.”

“Don’t be so sure of that son,” the man says. “I’d be most pleased to offer my services.”

Luke meets his eyes. “What’s it going to cost me?”

“Lucas, my boy,” the man says, baring his teeth like a rabid dog, “it’s not going to cost you a damned thing.”

Two years ago, Luke sits in the viewing room of an executioner’s chamber and watches Samuel Charles Whitney put to death for the murder of Olivia Prescott. His face is hard and his heart is harder but he doesn’t look away as Whitney’s body twitches.

“It’s going to be all right.” Reed squeezes his shoulder. “It’s over.”

But it isn’t over. He doesn’t know how it could possibly be finished. Samuel Charles Whitney is dead, but so is Olivia Prescott. He didn’t know Whitney and he doesn’t feel any different.

Day before yesterday, Reed finds Luke at the top of the mountain watching the gaping hole of nothing that threatens to swallow existence itself. “You’ve got to put it back,” he says. “Don’t you see what you’re doing?”

“I can fix that,” Luke says.

On alternate Tuesdays, Reed has a pet tortoise, a guinea pig, and a brother.

“Luke,” he says. “Been a while.”

Three hundred and sixty four days ago, Reed stands in the unfinished basement of his best friend’s house. “I think you lost it.”

“It’s a time machine,” Luke says. “I’m going to fix it.”

“I know you’ve lost it.” Reed surveys the contraption. “Christ, Luke, even if it were possible, there’s no way you’re smart enough to pull it together. Not on your own.”

“I had help.”

“I don’t even want to know who.”

“Are you going to stand there and wisecrack or are you going to listen?”

“I’m thinking wisecrack.”

“Reed, I really need you right now. Are you with me or not?”

The humor floods out of the situation and Reed feels his back pop as he straightens out of his habitual slouch. “You know I am.”

Eighteen years ago a boy spits blood onto the grass and holds out his hand. “Those kids are assholes,” he says.

Luke grins up at John Reed and every single time, it’s the same, it’s the same, it’s the same.

Six months ago, Reed bumps into a gray-haired man in gray suit and a bowler’s hat.

“Excuse me,” he says.

Two weeks ago NASA notes an anomaly over the North Pole. They dismiss it as random noise caused by the aurora borealis.

Then it starts growing.

Ten years ago a guidance counselor writes the following recommendation for Lucas G. Russell: Lucas is an intelligent young man with a drive to achieve I have seldom witnessed. His dogged persistence and unwillingness to accept defeat will serve him well in future endeavors. I have no doubts that Lucas is destined for great things…

Ten days ago, NASA sends an exploratory team through the fissure growing over the North Pole. They lose contact ten seconds after entry. Attempts to reestablish contact fail.

Greenland is evacuated.

Last night, Reed stares through the fissure and sees the worlds through it: this world a hundred times over with a hundred different John Reeds and a hundred different Lucas Russells and a hundred different lives he has lived but shouldn’t have.

“I think you broke time,” Reed tells Luke. “I’m almost impressed.”

Half the world looks and sees Heaven opening up for them. The other half sees Hell. Reed doesn’t see that. Reed sees the failings of man and his best friend’s biggest mistake.

“I can fix this,” Lucas says and disappears.

“No you can’t,” Reed answers.

Today, a little man with gray hair, gray skin, and a gray suit watches the fear crescendo around him. A bit of fire seeps into the gray eyes.

“Kaboom,” says the Devil, and smiles.

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Numbers, Numbers Everywhere

February 2015

Sometimes, as I’m putting together an issue, I realize that the stories I’m publishing are all related somehow. This month it’s not completely true, but only one of the items isn’t number-related. I’ll get to that in a minute.

First, the Preditors & Editors Poll numbers. Thanks to all of you who voted for us; notable standings are:

  1. Flash Fiction Online: #5 for Fiction Magazine/e-zine
  2. Bruce Holland Rogers, Short-short Sighted: #3 for Nonfiction Article
  3. Alan Grayce, “A Delivery of Cheesesteaks”: #4 for Science Fiction Short Story
  4. Jake Freivald: #8 for Magazine/e-zine Editor

To the stories:

The numbers in Paige Gardner’s “The Times That Bleed Together” all relate to time. She’s a college junior, but the complexity of this story would be hard even for more experienced writers to pull off. Its structure, which incorporates shifting time boundaries and repeated timelines, reminds me of Glenn Lewis Gillette’s “Downstream From Divorce”, but whereas Gillette’s story is earthly, Gardner’s is very much not.

Pêlos” by Aaron Bilodeau is a lighthearted and fun, a romantic fantasy. Plus it deals with gold, and dirt. And a bull. Or at least the potential for those things. If you hated math class, this is the best place to be in this issue.

Aimee C. Amodio’s “Six Reasons My Sister Hates Me” is one of those interesting stories that has a hard time settling into a plot, but which (as Bruce Holland Rogers will tell you later) is still a story because it satisfies the way a story should. I love these two characters, even though I barely know either one of them, and even though the narrator isn’t particularly reliable. It’s science fiction, but it may have broader appeal among those who like character-driven stories.

This month’s Classic Flash, “The Five Boons Of Life”, is by Mark Twain — but those of you who think he’s only a humorist will be surprised. Its ending reminds me of the humble prayer that God not give us what we deserve.

Our Short-short Sighted column by Bruce Holland Rogers is called “A Story of n Words: How Low Can You Go?.” But in order to discuss how short a story can be, he has to address what a story is. People who like nice, precise definitions will be disappointed, but as I’ve grown older I’ve come to appreciate subjective answers more than ever. I think he does a wonderful job. And when you check out his examples — six one-sentence stories — I hope you’ll see how gratifying these little stories can be. I was never a big fan of Hemingway’s “For sale: baby shoes, never worn,” but Bruce’s little stories pack quite a punch. I was especially touched by the sixth one.

Thanks for reading, and don’t forget to vote!

 

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